description of people and places
Answers
Explanation:
Describing People
Let’s start looking at what you shouldn’t do. Read this text:
My Best Friend (250-300 words)
“My best friend’s name is Stephen. He is tall and thin. He is strong. He has got brown eyes and brown hair and his hair is quite short and curly. Stephen is my friend because he is a good person he is happy and he helps me. He broke his leg once and he cried but he is usually a happy person.
He has got two sisters one older than him and one younger than him and he lives in the same town as me. We went to the same school together and he was very naughty, like me. Now he goes to University because he is very clever. He is bad sometimes but sometimes he is quiet and shy.
I met Stephen when I was six years old at school. At the beginning we weren’t friends but now we are because he is a good person and we always have a good time when we see each other. He smiles a lot but we don’t see each other very much now because he is at university and I am still in our town. It’s a bit sad I don’t see him so much but when we see each other we meet and have a drink and talk about things together and I like that.” (215 words)
What do you think of this description? Grammatically, it is perfect- there are no mistakes in spelling either……. but I would not give it more than 5/10. These are the reasons:
Basic Vocabulary
Basic Grammar
No structure
Repetition
Doesn’t explain (Good? Bad? Clever? Quiet? Naughty? Shy? Give examples!!)
Badly used punctuation
Basically, this fails because it does not do the job- I do not know anything real about Stephen because he has not been described. My Favourite Place (250-300 words)Play
“I had been born just one month before when my family packed their bags and we drove to Cornwall to visit my gran. Every year and every summer of my childhood this was repeated, and this county has always been for me a second home.
As a child, Cornwall meant wide beaches with terrific waves that knocked you over when you went into the sea, or smaller coves flanked by rocks, leaving pools at low tide where you could look for crabs and shellfish. When I was a bit older my parents often left me with my brothers to walk along the coast, and in the evenings we used to eat pasties and icecreams in the fishing ports on the South coast.
As my parents now live in this county, it is still an important part of my life. I love the rough and wild landscape of the North side; up on the cliffs by the empty tin mine chimneys, looking down at the lines of white surf. I have got to know the South coast more, too- its softer lines and quieter coast, the impressive Falmouth bay, and the genteel elegance of the capital, Truro.
Cornwall isn’t for everybody- It is the rainiest region of a rainy Island, and you can feel far away from the action and the events of England’s big cities. Everything seems slower, quieter, more in the past. If I was asked if I wanted to live there, at the moment my answer would be no- but I will always return to Cornwall, and Cornwall will always be with me.”
(266 words)
Did you like it? (This one isn’t invented).
Notice the division of paragraphs