essay on mobile phones ,some say it is boon and otheds say it is dangerous to society explain with evidence
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Mobile Phones and Children
by mae
can someone please proof read my answer to:
The dangers and complexities of the modern world have made the mobile phone an absolute necessity for children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The ever changing society we live in these days is unfortunately acclaimed with increasing rates of crime making it a very unsafe place to live in for everyone. children safety is compromised where disturbing offences such as abduction and any kinds of abuse are more prevalent thee days. Due to this reason, the use of mobile phones particularly by children, have been considered as a must to address this issue.
Parents or guardians nowadays have supplied their own children with mobile phones as a means of a safety reassuring device. Both parties benefit more from the technical use of a mobile phone especially in conditions we live, where dangers can arise at any point in time. Should safety be compromised from children, they can easily contact their parents or other members within the family, and other appropriate persons, such as the police, who is also concerned of their well being. This easy communication access, allows for relatives or the receiver on the line to act for safety in a timely manner. Furthermore, parents have the ease of mind to their children's whereabouts. The high technology of mobile phones allow them to easily contact or be informed with updates about their children's day.
On the other hand, I believe such device is not a necessity for children in surviving this world evolved with crimes and complexities. Firstly, education can be provided to the young ones in regards to safety practices. This refers to knowing who can be trusted and not associating to strangers, never be physically in isolation and must be in large groups, and last but not least, informing them of where and who to go for safety, such as teachers, councillors or the police. These are very simple and cost effective, yet very effective ways in minimising and preventing dangers that can happen to children. Secondly, it is understandably important for parents to be aware of their children's day, however, constant communication which is considered as vital, can also interfere with these children's development of independence. Lastly, the use of mobile phones open endless opportunities of social and online gaming use, which can impact their interpersonal skills with other people and predispose them to violence. Evidently children are potentially imposed to dangers with their use of mobile phones.
To conclude, although the device provide security for children while living in a troublesome and complicated world, I strongly believe it is unnecessary and inappropriate for children to own a mobile phone. Education and proper guidance should be provided for these children in order to live safely in this kind of environment we live in.
GREATLY APPRECIATED IF YOU GUYS COMMENT ON IT ... :)
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Aug 16, 2013
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by: Anonymous
the essay is way too long...I don't think the length of essay should be more than approximately 280 words.
Aug 22, 2013
Not a through edit by no means
by: Anonymous
I HAVE TO USE CAPITAL LETTERS FOR CORRECTIONS. I have skimmed quickly. There are likely more corrections to be made than what I have indicated.
ever-changing is one word.
acclaimed – you have used the wrong word.
children’s safety – you missed the apostrophe. You also have typos which I have not corrected.
Due to this reason, the use of mobile phones particularly by children, have been considered as a must to address this issue. HAS been, not HAVE been
Parents or guardians nowadays have supplied their own children with mobile phones as a means of a safety reassuring device. **OWN – this word does not belong in this sentence
Both parties benefit more from the technical use of a mobile phone especially in conditions we live *IN, where dangers can arise at any point in time. **MORE does not belong in this sentence.
Should safety *OF CHILDREN* be compromised, they can easily contact their parents or other members within the family, and other appropriate persons, such as the police, who is also concerned WITH their well being.
This easy communication access, allows for relatives or the receiver on the line to act for safety in a timely manner. **AWKWARD SENTENCE.
Furthermore, parents have the ease of mind IN REGARDS TO their children's whereabouts. The high technology of mobile phones allowS them to easily contact THEIR CHILDEN or be informed with updates about their children's day. On the other hand, I believe such device is not a necessity for children in surviving this world evolved with crimes and complexities. **EVOLVED – wrong word. U can use riddled.
Lastly, the use of mobile phones openS* endless opportunities of social and online gaming use, which can impact their interpersonal skills with other people and predispose them to violence.