Example:
The girl was embarrassed when the class laughed at her.
Rewrite: The girl could feel her face getting warm as her cheeks turned bright red. She pulled her hoodie over her head to hide her eyes that were filled with tears. The class’s laughter at her mistake could be heard from down the hallway.
Your turn! Use sensory details to make these sentences more descriptive.
The boy was happy when he pulled the fish out of the water.
Rewrite:
The girl was shocked when she saw the car accident in front of her.
Rewrite:
The woman was in pain because she had a terrible headache.
Rewrite:
My mom was angry at me for coming home 2 hours late.
Rewrite:
Answers
Answer:
Step-by-step explanation:
The boy was happy when he pulled the fish out of the water.
When he took the fish out of the sea, the boy was happy.
The girl was shocked when she saw the car accident in front of her.
The girl was surprised to see the traffic crash right in front of her.
The woman was in pain because she had a terrible headache.
The woman was in agony because she had a headache that was awful.
My mom was angry at me for coming home 2 hours late.
My mom was mad at me 2 hours late on coming home.
Answer:
The girl was embarrassed when the class laughed at her.
The girl could feel her face getting warm as her cheeks turned bright red. She pulled her hoodie over her head to hide her eyes that were filled with tears. The class’s laughter at her mistake could be heard from down the hallway.
Your turn! Use sensory details to make these sentences more descriptive.
The boy was happy when he pulled the fish out of the water.
The girl was shocked when she saw the car accident in front of her.
The woman was in pain because she had a terrible headache.
My mom was angry at me for coming home 2 hours late.