Question

In my own personal opinion, I believe that all amusement-park roller coasters should be required to undergo thorough and complete inspections once they have reached the old age of fifteen years old. From what I have seen and read, most roller coaster accidents that tend to occur on older steel roller coasters can be traced to poor, inadequate, bad maintenance. The engineering technology of old should be considered obsolete and out of date, and amusement parks should be forced to comply with strict safety rules and regulations that revolve around the idea that once a coaster has reached fifteen years of age, it should be taken apart and put back together with newer, better, more technologically sound, and safer roller coaster mechanical parts. I think and strongly feel that changing the current standards of roller coaster safety urgently needs to be made a federal law. It is the Constitutional responsibility of the federal government to keep citizens safe. how to make a small paragraph of this ​

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     It is my belief that roller coaster should undergo through complete check after 15 years of their age. According to my research, most roller coaster accident happens after 15 years of age so they should be rebuilt after 15 years of age as after that they tend to lose apart and accidents occur.

     In this new age, we get new technology every year which helps us make strong and reliable things. So with new technology, we can guarantee the safety and entertainment of roller coaster rides. It should be the federal government’s responsibility and the federal government should pass a law against the use of old roller coasters to maintain the safety of people.