Question

please help me to edit this story if you don't know please don't answer if you answered irrelevant anewer I will report that​

Answer 1

Answer:

here are the things you should edit in the story

• change the name of the girl cuz it sounds like a pet name
• and her mother became bedridden not becomes bedridden
• "after the death of her father she can't loose her family income cuz family income means the income the entire family brings and only her father has died so how can she loose the family income " so it will be since the mother was bedridden and her father died she didn't have money to run the house
• The little brother and sister started crying for food which made her sad
• that's all the rest of the story is great...

Explanation:

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