Question

Read the rough draft of a student’s conclusion to an argumentative editorial.

(1) Year-round schooling would help student achievement. (2) Not so much information would have to be crammed into nine months. (3) Furthermore, the elimination of long breaks, particularly summer break, would significantly reduce "learning loss” and the additional time wasted at the beginning of each academic year to reteach previously learned material. (4) It is clear that year-round schooling helps students learn and retain more. (5) The United States is not the only country to experiment with a year-round school schedule. (6) Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, these people need to open their eyes and see that students in these schools consistently score higher on certain assessments than students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars. (7) It is about time that we replaced our outdated and inefficient school calendars.

Why should sentence 4 be removed from this conclusion?
It criticizes those who disagree with the writer.
It strengthens the viewpoint of the opposition.
It states a fact that is unrelated to the topic.
It unnecessarily restates the editorial’s claim.

Answer 1

Sentence 4 should be removed from the passage as It unnecessarily restates the editorial’s claim.

• The passage starts with the sentence that the year-round schooling will help the student's achievements and sentence four again restates that it is clear that the year-round schooling will help students to earn and retain more

• The inference is what is left to the reader.  Sentence four is the repetition of the same concept that is once clarified and has no necessity in the paragraph. Thus, it is the needless reaffirmation of the editorial argument by the sentence.