Suppose recently you had to change your place of residence. Write a page in
your diary about the experience of shifting from a familiar neighbourhood to a
new place
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So my essay for this prompt is about the quality of education in my area, which I care a lot about. If I could change anything about my hometown, it would genuinely be that. I write in the essay about the effect of low-quality education on students' mental health, aspirations, and chances of getting into college. The essay is basically about how much better and more successful and happy those in my community would be if we had more funding for our school.
I have had the essay reviewed many times on here, and I got various comments such as:
"It seems you may be writing about this to explain why your academic achievements are weak" (Which is absolutely not true. My academics are very strong IN
SPITE of my quality of education)
"It seems like you are complaining"
"It is a bad idea to diss your school"
About half of all of the reviews had suggestions such as these.
It seems to me that these comments are here either because the topic itself is a bad idea to write about, or it is simply how I am writing about it. I hope the latter is true, because I really do care about the effect of education on students, and I want the colleges I'm applying to to see that.
So my question is: Is this just a bad topic to write about? Do I have to pick something else? Thank you:)