Question

Using the details in the following groups of sentences, phrase/create a concise and comprehensive thesis statement for an outline on the subject (review L4 on how to create a thesis statement).

(1) A business style of recruitment suggests that serving in the armed foces. is just another job. (2) The emphasis is not on patriotic duty or obligation to serve one's country, but on self-interest. (3) A complete military service draws heavily upon minorities. (4) It thus places an unfair burden on youth from poor, unprivileged families to defend the country. (5) The mental aptitude of recruits in a purely voluntary program is lower than it would be if all youth were required to fulfill a military obligation, and (6) sophisticated new weapons and weapon systems require more intelligence and mental alertness that was required of servicemen two to three decades ago.


PLS HELP. IDK how to do this.​

Answer 1

Consise

According to the given sentences the consise and comprehensive thesis statement for an outline on the subject is written below.

Serving in the armed forces, is an another job. And it depends on self interest. The youth were required to fulfill a military obligation and sophisticated new weapons, weapons systems and more intelligence and mental alertness.

Answer 2

Concise writing involves the usage of most effective words to write a passage, thereby removing the weak or unnecessary words.

• The concise for the passage is -
• Working in the armed forces depends on self-interest. Military services draw heavily on youth to protect the nation.
• In a voluntary programme, youth were required to fulfil a military duty. Advanced modern arms systems demanded more intellect than was required few decades ago by soldiers.