Which revision would most improve sentence 7?
suggesting an alternative plan to replace the current school calendar
explaining why the current school calendar is outdated and inefficient
expressing an opinion about those who oppose changing the calendar
restating the strongest piece of evidence used to support the claim
Answers
Answer:
Following is the revision required to correct the sentences;-
Explanation:
1- suggesting an alternative plan to replace the current school calendar
Ans: Suggest an alternative plan to replace the current school calendar.
2- explaining why the current school calendar is outdated and inefficient
Ans: Suggest an alternative plan to replace the current school calendar.
3- explaining why the current school calendar is outdated and inefficient
Ans: Explain why it is outdated and inefficient.
4- expressing an opinion about those who oppose changing the calendar
Ans: Express an opinion about those who oppose changing it.
5-restating the strongest piece of evidence used to support the claim
Ans: Restate the strongest piece of evidence used to support the claim.
What changes were made?
The paragraph above contains in which it was necessary to change the verbs from "ing" form to imperative ones (used to give orders, commands,instructions).
A few pauses were added, followed by full stops as well to help divide the sentences and make them better.
At another point, to cut down repetitive, it was used to replace "the current school calendar". The pronoun "it" (third person singular) was used.