Which sentence should Gordon revise to make it more precise, and why?
Answers
The missing options of the question are
A. Gordon should revise sentence 1 to provide specific details about what “struck” him as he first entered the room.
B. Gordon should revise sentence 2 to describe his dreams more clearly and explain what he hopes to accomplish one day.
C. Gordon should revise sentence 3 to replace vague words like “countless” and “delicious” with more precise adjectives.
D. Gordon should revise sentence 4 to add detailed examples about the many cooking basics he learned from his parents.
The answer is option A.
Explanation
- The question is from passage which is an excerpt from Gordon's personal narrative.
- The passage describes Gordon's personal experience on entering the catering profession.
- The first lines in the passage is "When I first entered the room, I was really struck by what I saw."
- The following sentences in the passage does not talk anything about the first line.
- And he does not give a clear explanation at what was the thing that struck him or what was that he saw in the room as he entered it.
So the first line need to be revised to make the reader understand better.
Hope this helps.
Gordon should revise the first sentence to give completely specific details regarding what “struck” him as he initially entered the room. The first sentence is given below.
When the author first entered the room, he was truly struck by what I saw. The narrative should start with an excellent opening hook. It should be statement which makes the readers desire to reading it again and again.