Question

Can you guys read over this and help me with any errors?? Thanks! And this is a true story about me..the teacher wanted something personal. Please don't hate. (This is only parts from the essay!)


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About two years ago my parents got into a huge fight. My mom was seeing another guy whom I don't like, whom I dispise. My dad wasn't having it so he declared a divorce.

My mom is dating an abusive guy whom discriminates, abuses and misuses. He is rich and thinks he can buy everyone with money.

You understand?
June of last year I went to live with the "Abusive BF" back then he wasn't abusive then I started coming home to either mom having a broken bone or brusies all over her

I tried calling the authrorites on them because of it but they were always drunk
He told me if my mom and him weren't dating that I'd be his (sad) with this my heart snapped. I had an older guy way older hitting on me...here it's considered rape..(I've never told anyone that, you're the first.)

Both parents were constantly drunk to where they would get into fights in front of me and I couldn't handle it....something then happend
It got to much for me to handle that on my birthday last year....I locked myself in the bathroom...tears steaming from my eyes... i had a bottle of pills in front of me. I was going to overdose..
I overdosed on pain meds and ended in the hostpital in a coma on my birthday
I ended up in a coma for a month..when I woke up I found out I had a kidney transplant because they shut down.
Whn I woke up i also noticed I wasn't breathing by myself
I was hooked up to a stabilizer which is a tube that goes into your mouth for oxygen
I also found out my lungs had collasped
I had to stay in the hospital for another week to make sure I was stabalized
After the hospital I was put in a mental institute because I tried to kill myself and almost sucedded

Answer 1

it made me cry.

there are no  errors in ur essay

Answer 2

There are multiple errors in the essay, especially related to the structure and diction utilized. This personal write-up has also some unclear sentences and expression which make it more confusing for the reader to understand. The tense is also not consistent and you didn't utilize any transitions which are very much required in here.  

You can do better and I suggest that you proof-read every content that you create from now on. You have a sense of creation and can frame bigger write-ups easily, but this again requires a proper understanding of grammar. So practice more and avoid silly mistakes such as missing punctuation and spelling errors.