Question

find faults in the story writing

Answer 1

First of all three friends had phonetic of parties OK then afterwards in the second line of party instead of that the party will come then first Paris last line event at the jungle third para is quite looking like incomplete what do you mean by store not store store s t o h last win last para instead of one vehicle comes it will be one vehicle had came. Now, in last para  a man with beard will come not bread