His teeth chattered quickly, like a set of wind up teeth, and his eyes darted back and forth in a panic.
The adverb quickly should be removed.
The structure of the sentence should be shorter.
Descriptions should focus on the character, not the setting.
The adverbial phrase in a panic should be removed.
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two or more verbs or verb phrases ... Set the nozzle back in its slot before paying for the gas. ... To set off nonessential clauses and phrases; to set off introductory adverbial
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