Question

Is this perfect?

Through this letter, I would like to draw your attention to the loss of birds due to human activities.

As you know that birds are also a part of the ecosystem. It has disturbed due to various human activities like deforestation, etc. Due to this, almost 15 species of birds are endangered. if we will not stop these activities, then very soon these species are gonna extinct. It is a very serious matter.

I request you to take some actions in this direction, as soon as possible.

Answer 1

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yes this is perfect English as well as grammar.

Answer 2

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