Question

Please give honest opinions on the start of my story-

There was nothing,but nothing was there.nothing was everything and everything was nothing.And that's where it started.It was only small yet,a ball of light,shimmering like a sequin fell from the nothingness.Finally,there was something.It grew larger as in fell.The space around me was light blue with tufts of white floating in the nothing.I noticed the sequin,a vibrant hue of yellow,hung in the middle of the nothingness."Let there be light".I froze.What was that?Then the sequin flashed and warmth hit my back."Let there be sea".Within seconds, I heard the sound of water,crashing and coming towards me.I ran.But tripped and fell.The water drew back,as if it was hurt.Something blew in my face,playful and breezy.“Let the water teem with living creatures, and let birds fly above the earth across the vault of the sky.”Creatures i had never seen before approached me.Lions and penguins,hedgehogs and dogs.Gathering around me.This was not nothing.This was everything.The everything had consumed the nothing.The voice bellowed,as if from the heavens,
"Welcome to the Garden of Eden,Adam".

Answer 1

it a good one
you are a good story writer

Answer 2

It is an amazing story.
Well I like the story you have written.