Question

pls correct my short writting if needed

Topic: Too much money is a bad thing.



Too much money is extremely terrible for anyone, from a 5 year old kid to a senior citizen. If there is too much money in somebodies life then they become greedy or show off about their things. Too much money is bad but also too less money is not sufficient to run a normal life. A normal person should have all the things that is enough to survive every day. If a person gets more money than needed then they will buy a lot of junk and use only some of them. A rich person would be categorized as too much money but it comes from their hard work and they use it wisely. A poor person would be described as a non-happy person but in real they are just people who can’t do anything to help themselves have a better life. I think if anyone does get more money than needed then they should give it to the poor’s or orphanages or places where it could be used wisely. Money is an object that you earn buy doing hard work and you use it to buy anything you wants. Whoever has more money can buy more things and whoever has less money can buy less things.

So the end is that too much money is bad but still there is one more thing that includes money. Some people make fake money and use it as real money

Answer 1

I think u can use someone's life instead of somebodies......
and the last line can be included in the above paragraph..
that's all I think about ur writing..
hope it will help uu....
and its a good writing..